Did i write a good poem...?

March 14th, 2010
  • She rises up from restless sleep
    To greet another day
    She wonders if he thought of her
    As he started on his way
    The first thing on her mind was him
    And her love swells like a tide
    She always starts her morning ouut
    Wishing he were at her side

    She looks up with saddened eyes
    To catch a lonely stare
    The lost girl in the mirror sighs
    And brushes back her hair
    For just a brief few moments
    She smiles a secret smile
    Her finger reaches out to trace
    I love you, on the tile

    Memories so bitter sweet
    Go rushing through her head
    Thoughts of how he held her close
    As they shared the same soft bed
    Music, wine, and candlelight
    Making love at break of day
    Then the sadness of A brave goodbye
    As she slowly walked away

    She knew when it all started
    Some days would feel this blue
    Real love is worth the price you pay
    And she knows this one is true
    So she pulls herself together
    As she whispers out his name
    Not knowing many miles away
    He's whispering the same.


  • To be honest you lost me on the begining. I've read so many poems in here talking about how someone wakes up in the morning and how they end up with love on their side. It was a little dry on the imagery, but its a nice attempt.


  • Yes, I love it! Wish i could write this well.


  • You get an A++. This is very well written.


  • She is alone,now, in her room, big and empty
    Just seems yesterday when love dwelt a plenty
    Thinking of him, she wishes he could be here
    With every passing moment in mind he is near







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